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想了想，决定写个长评。
（我还是第一次写长评www）
音乐很有Puru的感觉，但又有自己的特色，美的同时蕴含力量感，很喜欢。
谱面做的也可以，难度刚刚好（好像可以弄Grimheart曲变更？）
bga的话，，，抱歉没仔细看（
不过效果也不错。
这场比赛里挺喜欢的作品，难得见有Downtempo，如果下次还参加的话希望继续努力！
（这么一看好像也不长）

 

Played 7K ANOTHER.

Most important part of downtempo and mood music is ambience, so personally I'd have liked to hear more background elements with ambient textures, such as pads and FX, etc. I'd also like to hear the low end brought out more (though could easily be done in mastering phase). The song is well written though! The main repeated melody is tender and emotional. Just... I was hoping to feel the ambience more.

The final score will be "5 out of 10".
This will use a stricter scoring system compared to previous years.
That's all for now.

Thank you for your advise on the arrangement and mixing.

 

The pros and cons are one and the same.

Like Puru, but too much so. Defining borrowing and learning and copying should not stop at whether one has named who one has RESPECTED, but depends on whether one has new ideas, a new understanding of one's own songs, and the quality control of one's own work that one achieves after imitating and learning.

The point that the ending of the tune is poorly knotted was mentioned elsewhere earlier, and the artist's statement was 'Puru does it too, so I do it too.'

I don't think this is right. At least from the point of view of the song Filament (the source of '9.7') from which it is borrowed, in this parody Ice Flower certainly fails. I think that using such excuses to cover up one's problems is also insulting to the subject of the parody itself.

But that aside, I did get a sense of the artist's love for Puru. The piece itself has a lot to offer, and the first half of the tune draws on the characteristics of puru's other works, and it's nice to be able to say that the choice of tone and orchestration has mapped out the characteristics of the chill style.

For a first time BOF contestant this is well done and I look forward to your other works in the future.

Thank you for your detailed suggestion. Honestly this kind of ending is my beloved, which stops at the climax, leaving the best atmosphere resounding. Also with the arrangement of the whole song I want to express the development from a dark and freezing environment to a bright and tender one with the blossom of the ice flower, keeping till the end without withering. I was not confident enough to express my own understanding at that time so I just said that I learnd from Filament. I'm sorry to offend you and I hope you can understand me now.
I appreciate different opinions, as it can make me improve. I'm always determined to make progress at the next time with every suggestion received. I'm not going to completely deny my thought of arrangement, but your criticism tells me that indeed I'm supposed to make it better. Also indeed I imitated Puru too much but didn't reach that point. So thank you for your precious opinion.

 

透明感があってじっくり聴かせるタイプの素敵な楽曲でした。
哀愁漂うメロディがとても綺麗でカッコ良かったです。
SPAをプレイ。
これ叩きたいって音がしっかり配置されていて良かったと思います。
LNも程良く全体的にも11相応の難易度構成でした。
欲を言えば曲を通して山場となるような場所が無かったので
もう少し起伏があるとより楽しい譜面となりそうです。
制作お疲れ様でした。

Thank you for your comment and suggest!

 

制作お疲れ様でした。

 

音乐: 285/300
谱面: 270/300
演出: 185/200
新手友好度: 190/200
一流曲子，辛苦了

谢谢你的评价，也谢谢你关心我们这种萌新

 

총 점수 : 785점
제작 수고하셨습니다.

* 음악 ( 총 285점 )
곡 자체 멜로디나 구성은 매우 좋습니다만, 매우 반복적입니다. 곡 자체의 분위기는 좋지만 너무 일관된 분위기이다보니 약간 지루했습니다. 곡 자체의 전개는 괜찮았습니다.

* 채보 ( 총 300점 )
* 채보의 개인적인 재미 ( 200점 )
* 채보가 최소 한 키에 3종류 이상 ( 50점 )
* 플레이 가능한 키 종류가 2/3종류 이상 ( X )
* 가장 낮은 레벨의 채보가 5 이하 ( 50점 )
플레이한 채보 : SPA
채보 자체는 꽤 재미있었지만 음계를 무시한 구간이 상당히 많았습니다.

* BGA (총 100점 )
제가 플레이한 Another 채보에서는 BGA가 재생되지 않아서 확인해보니 Another는 BGA파일 설정이 잘못되어있었습니다. 다른 채보들은 정상이였습니다.
Ice Flower라는 곡명과 매우 잘 맞는 이미지의 BGA였습니다.

* BMS 구성 ( 총 25점 )
* 아이캐치 ( X )
* 프리뷰 ( X )
* BackBMP ( X )
* 배너 ( X )
* 리드미 파일 ( X )
* 빈 BMS 파일 ( X )
* BGA를 제외한 용량이 100MB 이하 ( 25점 )
BMS 구성은 위의 파일들이 들어있고 BMS에 적용되어있을 경우에 주는 점수입니다. 가급적 위에 있는 것들이 모두 있는 것을 선호하기에 점수를 설정했습니다.

* 내 컬렉션에 넣고 싶은가? ( 75점 )
곡 자체의 분위기를 좋아했습니다. 용량도 BGA를 제거하니 절반정도로 줄어서 좋았습니다.

Thank you for such a detailed comment. BTW I think using English in your comment would be more efficient and accurate for both you and most of the contestants.

Korean is my first language. And it's easier way to write an impression for me.

 

- 退屈な曲展開

製作お疲れ様でした。

 

thank you for your hard work,maybe i will write some comments later

谢谢永雏塔菲喵，谢谢永雏塔菲评价喵

 

とても綺麗な曲…！ こういうのめっちゃ大好きです！！

最初、ジャンルを見た時に「downtempo…苦手なやつかもなぁ」って思ってまして、正直かなり身構えてました（
でも、プレイして聴いてみたら…もうこれが最高にはまっちゃいまして…ｗ
透き通ったメロディとこの美しい旋律が、今回のタイトルの『冰花』のイメージにぴったりでしたし、このタイプのジャンルだと展開も平坦になりがちなところをしっかりと抑揚のあるもので仕上げられているので、もう文句なしと言っていいくらいのクオリティになっていました！
譜面も押しやすくてとても楽しかったですし、冷たさを全面的に感じる映像も最高でした！！ やっぱりこういう曲には透明感のある映像があってこそだよなぁ…

ということで簡単な感想ではありますが、今回はこれでお願いします！！

Thank you so much for such a detailed and comprehensive comment! It’s my honor that you like this works.

 

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Played Chart : SPA

전반부에 Puru님의 Grimheart라는 곡이 너무 강하게 느껴집니다. 후반부는 독창적인 전개였는데 전반부에도 그런 시도를 했다면 좋았을 것이라 생각합니다.

제작 수고하셨습니다. (Thank you for your hard work.)